- An introduction with who, what, where and when
- A body with a problem and solution
- A conclusion
- Seperate ideas with paragraphs
Deep deep down on the rocky shore there was a very friendly crab and his name was
Chris. He had just moved to the Pacific Northwest rocky shore.Chris had just started school and was finding it hard to settle in because the other crabs
were picking on him as he was the new crab on the rock. They really were bullying him! Chris had no weapons to protect himself from the bullies so that night he wished and
wished that he would have some claws to pinch the bullies if they were being mean. The
next morning Chris woke up and was amazed to see that his wish had come true. At school the next day Chris didn’t say anything, instead he waited to see what everyone
would say. Craig, the biggest bully in school, was the first one to come up to Chris. “What have you done Chris?” “I have some weapons to protect myself as I am sick of everyone picking on me. Beware of
my claws or else I will clip you! So please leave me alone Craig.” So Chris walked off. The
girl crabs now liked Chris. They all thought he was strong and tough. All the boy crabs were
scared of Chris and his new claws. At the end of school all the girls were asking Chris what he was doing in the weekends.
And that’s how the crab got its claws.
By Nicole
By Nicole

Nicole I like your introduction because it says who, what, when and where. You need to work on separating your ideas into paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteMiss Baker
Thank you Miss Baker for putting my narrative up on the blog.
DeleteI really like how you've organised your narrative. You have a clear introduction, a main body and a conclusion. The success criteria you may want to go back and work on is organising your ideas into paragraphs, which I bet you can do on your own!!! The part about Chris being "the new crab on the rock" made me smile... very clever! I hope Chris ends up being a nice crab and not a big bully himself.
ReplyDeleteThank you Miss Nobari for your comment,
DeleteI will start putting paragraphs in next time. Don't you worry Chris becomes a nice crab not a big bad bully crab.