Trade explanation - Kiefer

Here is the feedback we gave to Kiefer about the structure, language, spelling and grammar in his explanation about trade.

Explanation writing - how a turtle turns into an adult

Charlotte, Blake and Thomas have been focusing on getting the structure and language features correct for explanations.

They needed:
- an introduction
- a body with steps explaining how or why
- a conclusion
- technical or scientific language like turtles, eggs, hatch
- connective words like so, because, while
- sentence starters like first, next, then
- to have correct spelling, punctuation and check it makes sense

Explanation writing - how does the seat turtle grow into an adult?

Lily and Nicole have been focussing on getting the structure and language features correct for explanations.

They needed:
- an introduction
- a body with steps explaining how or why
- a conclusion
- technical or scientific language like turtles, eggs, hatch
- connective words like so, because, while
- sentence starters like first, next, then
- to have correct spelling, punctuation and check it makes sense

E-Learning class in room 6 

Hi my name is mark and think E-learning classes are better than non e-learning classes because in e-learning classes we get I-pads and in normal classes you don't learn as much. Plus you use more paper in normal classes and that means cutting down more trees and that would lead to the world having less oxygen but with IPads your saving the world by not using paper and 

How humans got hands

Kiefer has been focussing on making sure his narrative writing makes sense. His success criteria is:

• Re-read to check it make sense and make changes if not
• Use past tense eg: grew, played
• Have capital letters and full stops in the correct place

By Kiefer

How the creepers got their gun powder

I have been focussing on spelling. The remember to's from the teacher were:

• Spell common words correctly eg: the, at, then, when 
• Attempt harder words with your knowledge of letter sounds and blends
• Underline try words
• Correct try words with the use of a dictionary

By Riley

How the lion got its mane

Lucy has been focussing on punctuation in her narrative myth writing. Her success criteria was:

• Use capital letters for the start of sentences
• Use full stops at the end of sentences
• Use capital letters for the name of people and places
• Use speech marks for characters speaking

By Lucy